~ JoAnn
Father stood in the entranceway, glaring sternly at the two young boys.
"Devin … Vincent ..." Father sighed deeply. "You cannot fool me with those expressions of innocence. I could hear the squeaky bedsprings all the way in my chamber! We cannot afford another broken frame. You know the rule: no jumping on the bed. Please … mind me."
As he turned away he noted with wry amusement the furtive giggles emanating from the chamber behind him … and before he was halfway down the hall, he sighed once more, as his ears caught yet another suspicious squeak.
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13 comments:
Hey!! So short? Even shorter than those little boys...
Is this a drabble?
Good to see you in this group :-)
Claire
JoAnn's story fits perfectly with both this assignment and the with the last assignment's 100 word limit ;-) Welcome to Everything ... JoAnn.
A wonderful Kodak moment! A perfect snapshot, JoAnn. Can you imagine the energy in the tunnels with two such boys? Father did appear to have his hands full. I wonder how many bed frames in all?
Hi JoAnn! Welcome!
This is perfect---you've told a wonderful, full story in just a few wry words. (Though I do think it's damned amazing that Father's retained any hair at all, given what Vincent and Devin must have put him through LOL)
Great job---hope to see more from you here :)
JoAnn, in just a few words, you brought two precious little boys to life. Wonderful!!
What wonderful tales you weave, JoAnn! In such a short space, I felt lost in a moment - could imagine the exuberance of young boys, the rebellion, the childish excitement that must be assuaged. No scolding from Father can take it away. And that Father ... he wasn't truly convincing! I could hear his voice so vividly, and yet, there was amusement there, too. Wonderful job! And welcome to Everything... !
JoAnn, What a perfect snapshot of all the Wells men! I am absolutely convinced that it happened just that way! Welcome to Everything...! We are so blessed to count you as our friend!
Loved the mental picture of Vincent as a normal little boy.
JoAnn, welcome to the Thursday Night Writers Extraordinaire and thank you for this cheerful snapshot of mischief-making Devin and Vincent. It brought back memories of times I had to be the Parent, and even further back when I was the mischief maker! Nancy
Thnak you Joann! I wrote my story immediately after reading yours! It inspired me to wonder what would happen if it were Catherine and Vincent rather than Devin and Vincent setting the springs to squeak! Thank you, Thank you for the inspiration!
What a treat to have our dear JoAnn in this little corner of the tunnels. This was so sweet, like everything else she does!
Hi JoAnn!
It's great to see you here.
I loved your short story. I was exactly the same when I was little, you wouldn't think it, but I did have a mischeivous side.
I think Vincent and Devin would have been so sweet when they were young. Partners in crime for sure.
I hope you continue writing...
Love and lion hugs, Jodie xxoo
Lovely and short, JoAnn. But the joyful mischeivousness of Vincent and Devin as boys was captured so well ! Thank you. Tweetie Lynn
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