The Pause ~ Promises of Someday

by Aliset

“Catherine is,” Vincent began, and all of a sudden, he was 11 again, scuffing his feet as he tried to explain something to Devin.

What do I say? “She is my light in the darkness”? Too poetic and Devin always hated poetry.

“She is...everything”? Then Devin would want to know what “everything” means.

“She is my life”? True and then some...but I don't know this Devin, to tell him that. “Catherine is...more than a helper,” Vincent finally said in a hushed, private tone, and Devin, sensing the door opening, smiled.







Devin and Vincent at the secret gate




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12 comments:

Three Writers July 23, 2010 at 2:46 AM  

Krista, this is wonderful! You've captured the rush ... the wind ... the wave ... of Vincent's thoughts and then ... his choice. Perfect! Thank you! Nancy

Krista July 23, 2010 at 6:13 AM  

Awwww, Nancy, thank you. 100 words was rough LOL. I'm glad it worked for you.

-Krista :)

Vicky July 23, 2010 at 8:16 AM  

And the tiny flashback finds its way in... I love it!

Carole W July 23, 2010 at 9:46 AM  

Krista, I love that image - that Devin wasn't the poetic type and that he's likely a bit nosey too, needing to know just exactly what 'everything' means. There's such playfulness between them, even after all the missing years. You created something deep with just a few words. I love it.

Carole

SandyX July 23, 2010 at 10:05 AM  

I so see young Vincent scuffing his feet here, and he's adorable! A little sad, but true, that he doesn't "know this Devin," the brother finally returned. But that door was opened ...

Cyndi D July 23, 2010 at 11:34 AM  

I love the image of a young and unsure Vincent looking to his big brother! And Then the adult Vincent not knowing this Devin. Perfect.

Krista July 23, 2010 at 7:07 PM  

You guys. You're going to make me all weepy again. :-) Thank you all so much for being such a continuing inspiration.

-Krista :)

OKGoode July 25, 2010 at 5:24 AM  

So good - makes me wish I'd thought to do a flashback! So inspired!

Brit July 28, 2010 at 11:42 AM  

“She is...everything”? Then Devin would want to know what “everything” means.

yes Devin would..however so do I! :)
She is everything.. its sooo beautiful, so perfect of a word!! so full of emotion..everything.

THANK YOU Krista!
SUPERB!

Krista July 28, 2010 at 7:51 PM  

Thank you, Brit. :-) The thing I love about writing Vincent is his ability to say (and think) universes in one word or two. "Everything" is such a simple word, but it so, so fits. :)

-Krista :)

Brit July 30, 2010 at 8:05 AM  

Yes I love that about Vincent as well. :-)

Michelle K. August 1, 2010 at 4:50 PM  

Krista, you know I felt a kinship with you the minute I read this. Something about doors opening ... but I love how you've presented it here. That Devin sees that door opening, that he realizes Vincent has surpassed all he'd ever dreamed. Wonderful!

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